In the article “The Double Edge of Globalization”, Chanda (2007) states that there are pros and cons of globalization, and government intervention is essential to solve these issues.
Globalization has increased international trade and consumption, which contributed to the economic growth. It has also led to the improvement of global telecommunications, which enabled instantaneous transmission of news and images to the world.
Globalization has increased international trade and consumption, which contributed to the economic growth. It has also led to the improvement of global telecommunications, which enabled instantaneous transmission of news and images to the world.
However, globalization has caused deforestation, global warming, and increased pollution. Increasing consumers' demand has led to rapid loss of forest cover worldwide. Global warming causes environmental devastation, and may potentially shrink the global economy. In addition, the burning of coal and use of chemicals can pollute the world's environment.
Governments should work together to tackle these global challenges. Montreal Protocol was a successful example of efforts in combating ozone depletion. With the commitment of nations and effective global governance, it is possible to avert these consequences.
Governments should work together to tackle these global challenges. Montreal Protocol was a successful example of efforts in combating ozone depletion. With the commitment of nations and effective global governance, it is possible to avert these consequences.
Hey Claire!
ReplyDeleteThank you for posting your your summary early, I really appreciate the effort (:
However I would like to point out a few mistakes :
1) there are a few spelling errors. This can be seen from the word "buring" in the last line of paragraph 3 and "ad" in the third sentence of the last paragraph. It should be "burning" and "and"
2) The word "While" in the last sentence of the third paragraph should not be used at the start of the sentence. Instead, you can phrase the sentence as "In addition, accelerated burning of coal and the use of chemicals pollute the world's environment."
3) The first sentence of the first paragraph should have a comma after the title of the article instead of a comma at the end of "In the article"
Cheers!
Chelsea (:
Hi Claire,
ReplyDeleteYour summary is clear and concise, addressing the main point of Chanda's article.
Just a question about the use of "government intervention" in the first paragraph of your essay. The word 'Intervention' carries a negative meaning, and in this article, government plays a seemingly important role in global governance. I suggest that you could replace 'intervention' with 'support'.
Thank you for your early post:)
Best
Su Miin
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ReplyDeleteHi, Claire, this is really a fabulous summary. It summarizes all the main points in the articles. And you have already corrected the errors which your friends pointed out earlier.
ReplyDeleteSo, I do not have many comment on your summary. But I thought you should post your 2nd draft with your corrections, not just corrected them on your first draft.
One last thing is your verb tense, I think using present tense is better instead of using past tense because globalization still exists in today's world. For example, in your second paragraph, "Globalization has increased international trade and consumption, which contributed to the economic growth.", you may change it to "Globalization has increased international trade and consumption, which contributes to the economic growth." as globalization nowadays is still contributing to the economic growth.
Last but not least, I really enjoy reading your summary =D
Best Regards,
Renfei
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